Bought Gone Girl in English in Spain, very interesting, reading it. But I keep a Russian translation on my phone, so if anything difficult comes up, I don’t have to go to a dictionary, but to the translation. And after a third of the book read – blood from my eyes. I don’t know who can like the Russian translation – only those who haven’t seen the original.
Eng: I’m using this journal to get better: to hone my skills, to collect details and observations
Rus: Работа в журнале — временная, она нужна, чтобы оттачивать навыки, копить наблюдения…
Darn, journal – it’s a diary! If they meant “journal”, they use magazine.
Eng: Nick prides himself on his packing skills: He is (was) the loader of the dishwasher, the packer of the holiday bags.
Rus: Ник гордится своим умением укладывать вещи. Ведь он работал (как-то!) загрузчиком посудомоечной машины, собирал сумки для пикника.
Darn, worked as a dishwasher loader… Nick is Amy’s husband, he just helped around the kitchen at home.
Eng: Amy’s cell was being monitored
Rus: Банковская ячейка Эми под наблюдением
Darn, translator, cell [phone] – it’s a phone!
Eng: dropped out of college and moved to Manhattan
Rus: в конце девяностых закончила колледж и перебралась в Манхэттен
Translator, dropped out means she left college halfway through. Not graduated from college.
Eng: I have a dash of ADD, and I’ve always found my wife a bit dazzling
Rus: Хотя у меня есть такой грешок — все преувеличивать
The translator clearly didn’t catch what ADD is 😉 It’s Attention Deficit Disorder
Eng: We have a cold-cut tray if you want, sweetheart
Rus: Там есть лоток с колотым льдом. Если хочешь, бери, дорогой
Cold cuts – that’s sliced meat. The curiosity is intensified by the fact that a page later Nick himself says: “we mainly live on cold cuts” – the translator translated the same word correctly, failing to notice the connection.
Eng: The awakening was mechanical. A spooky ventriloquist-dummy click of the lids: The world is black and then, showtime!
Rus: Обыденный механический процесс. Как будто фокусник распахнул черный ящик. Только что мир окутывала тьма, и вдруг — бац! — свет
Actually, spooky ventriloquist-dummy translates as creepy ventriloquist, and lids – it’s the doll’s eyelids. What’s with the magician darn.
Eng: My life was alarmless
Rus: У меня вообще беспорядочная жизнь
Actually, the author plays with the word alarm (alarm/clock, alarm). Nick means a life without alarm clocks and alarms (alarmless). The translator, however, delivered an abstract “disordered life,” completely losing the author’s irony.
Eng: Greedy journalists with knowing smirks and hollow legs, getting the free buzz before they go somewhere better.
Rus: Жадные журналисты усмехаются и
переминаются с ноги на ногу в ожидании халявного хавчика и бухла — напьются-нажрутся и свалят куда-нибудь еще.
Let’s put aside hollow legs – it’s actually an idiom, meaning the ability to drink a ton of alcohol without showing signs of intoxication, but darn where does shifting from foot to foot come from?
Eng: I was a writer who wrote about TV and movies and books
Rus: Я привык зарабатывать писательским трудом, сочинять романы, сценарии для кинофильмов и телевизионных программ
AAA! Nick wrote about movies and books — he’s a journalist, a pop culture critic. In translation, he became a novelist and screenwriter, which directly contradicts all further text (he himself tells the police: “journalism, pop culture”).
Eng: So there it came, out of nowhere, as Rand begged for his daughter’s return: a killer smile
Rus: Вот она, откуда ни возьмись, улыбка, о которой просил Ранд. Улыбка, так необходимая для его дочери. Улыбка убийцы
Rand didn’t ask for any smile 🙂 he was pleading for his daughter’s return, and at that very moment Nick flashed a smile. The translator invented “Rand’s request,” ruining a key scene of the first part. Plus, the wordplay is lost: a killer smile — primarily “a knockout smile” (see urban dictionary), and the ambiguity here is Flynn’s entire trick.
Eng: …people whose brains don’t work quick enough to blog or link or tweet…
Rus: …недостаточно гибкие, чтобы уйти в блогеры и городить всякую чепуху…
Is this because Twitter got blocked? 🙂
Eng: You guys not close?’ she asked. ‘We are the definition of not close.
Rus: — Ну, парни, не пора ли закругляться? — спросила детектив. — По-моему, пора
It seems the translator got carried away with creativity 🙂
Eng: A number of women – friends of my mom’s, friends of Go’s – had invited Amy to book clubs and Amway parties and girls’ nights at Chili’s.
Rus: Кое-кто — подруги моей мамы, друзья Го — приглашали Эми то в книжный клуб, то на заседание общества «Американский путь», то на вечерний девичник в «Чилиз гриль-бар».
For the translator’s information, Amway is a cosmetics company, which nobody translates into Russian as “American Way” 🙂 And Chili’s is indeed formally known as Chili’s Grill & Bar, although it seems no one knows it by its full name. It’s just a roadside restaurant chain.
And so – the whole book. This is just what I’m listing next to where I decided to make notes with a pencil, and only then, when I looked at “how interesting this was translated.” When I realized that such good stuff comprised half the book, I stopped marking it.
